the one that got smashed today

 《鸟绘》


这鸟很黑,但后颈上有块白。两翼的翼尖是白的。

尾羽两侧也有两块白。她在那独自走时,似乎从

来都不感到孤独。我不知道他是他,还是她,但

手机把它弄成了她,那我还是就叫她吧。


And the comments made, as follows,


"平淡中出奇,就是好诗" by ZCH


“属于重复写作 这样的感觉读过太多 需变革” by FDY


"由鸟及人有意思" by HJH


"可以回味,'她在那独自走时,似乎从来都不感到孤独',这样的句子不刻意,反而丰富“ by TX

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