YSXM000247 / 我弄错了 (multiple）

By Ouyang Yu

 

你随便选一个文字译这首看看，请注意错误：交口，变成了口交，还承认是错误：

这首比《66》还难一点，因为它的机关非常具体：

交口称誉
↓（误说）
口交称誉

而且诗的全部力量来自：

  1. 一个语言错误；
  2. 说错者意识到了错误；
  3. 公开承认错误；
  4. 但错误本身已经产生了新的意义。

所以翻译不能只译意思，必须保留“说错—纠正—认错”这个动作。

我选法语试试。

Je me suis trompé

Pardon, je voulais dire
des éloges unanimes.

Pas des éloges cunnilingues,
je me suis trompé.

—

Traduit du chinois par Ouyang Yu avec assistance de l’IA.

但这还不够好。

因为中文原诗里：

交口称誉

是一个正常成语。

口交称誉

则是把前后两个字调换后突然变黄。

这种效果法语几乎无法原样复制。

所以如果允许创造性翻译，我会更激进一点：

Je me suis trompé

Pardon, je voulais dire
des louanges de bouche en bouche.

Pas des louanges bouche-sur-bouche,
je me suis trompé.

这里：

de bouche en bouche

（口口相传）

变成：

bouche-sur-bouche

（嘴对嘴）

虽然没有中文那么猛，但至少保留了：

一个正常说法
↓
一个因为词序变化而突然跑偏的说法

这个结构。

其实我觉得这首诗很有意思的地方在于：

表面上它写的是一个错误。

实际上它写的是：

错误比正确更有创造力。

如果诗中人没有把“交口称誉”说错成“口交称誉”，这首诗根本不会存在。

所以最后一句：

我弄错了

既是认罪，也是炫耀。

因为读者已经发现：

真正有意思的恰恰是那个错误。

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